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  • ContactRida 3:39 pm on November 19, 2014 Permalink | Reply
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    creature of habit 

    “Humans are creatures of habit. No matter how clever they believe they are, their habits are always their undoing. Gurser’s habit was life insurance. First victims: his in-laws, the Ropers. Car accident. Nothing definitive on the crash, but he’s a skilled mechanic. Next: his mother-in-law. Easy target. Her depression over the sudden loss of her son and husband consumed her. He used her prescribed sleeping pills. We may never have caught him, but Al used the same bottle of pills on his wife Edith. See Sheriff? Habit.”

    In a defeated voice, Sheriff Marsden muttered, “Guess that’s why you’re the eff-bee-eye.”

    upgrade

    PHOTO PROMPT – Copyright – Claire Fuller

     
    • wildbilbo 5:16 am on November 25, 2014 Permalink | Reply

      I liked this take on the prompt – profiling a murderer (complete with jurisdictional in-fighting). Worked well.
      KT

    • Björn Rudberg (brudberg) 3:58 am on November 25, 2014 Permalink | Reply

      Ah.. good thing that the bad guys have habits. Makes it easy to be FBI.. wonder what the Sheriff’s habits are… Khaki pants?

    • Margaret 6:02 am on November 23, 2014 Permalink | Reply

      A little FBI psychological insight gave him a way in and solved the case. Maybe the sheriff can learn a thing or two for his next case. Good story.

      • ContactRida 5:59 am on November 24, 2014 Permalink | Reply

        thank you. i think the sheriff will learn but after he finishes licking his wounded pride…

    • sustainabilitea 10:12 am on November 20, 2014 Permalink | Reply

      Your last line reminded me of a series that takes place on an Indian reservation and they call the FBI man, FB-Eyes. 🙂

      janet

      • ContactRida 2:33 pm on November 20, 2014 Permalink | Reply

        haha:) never saw it but FBI agents think they’re so smart. was hoping to display some of the Sheriff’s disdain for them through his over-pronunciation:)

    • Claire Fuller 3:54 am on November 20, 2014 Permalink | Reply

      Nice story, well written. I was just a little confused when you had that his first victims were his in-laws, because this implies his mother-in-law and his father-in-law, but then he goes and kills his mother-in-law next. I understood it in the end, but perhaps it could be tightened…
      Claire

      • ContactRida 2:31 pm on November 20, 2014 Permalink | Reply

        thanks. will do next time. just wanted to tie this story to the last pic. so many people wanted Al caught for murdering his wife. just added a little background. she wasn’t his first but she was definitely his last:)

    • dmmacilroy 3:49 am on November 20, 2014 Permalink | Reply

      Dear Rida,

      I wish you’d make it a habit to write more here. You do it so well and this story is no exception. Well done.

      Aloha,

      Doug

      • ContactRida 2:25 pm on November 20, 2014 Permalink | Reply

        thank you so much Doug. i’v had ADHD my entire life. i jump from one thing to the next. writing has started to feel like homework assignments i avoid. it feels better when i am inspired instead of being “forced” to produce all of the time. writing has become that needy husband…

    • draliman 3:45 am on November 20, 2014 Permalink | Reply

      Poor sheriff, the FBI running roughshod all over his investigation and showing him up. They solved the crime, though!

  • ContactRida 4:19 am on November 7, 2014 Permalink | Reply
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    gone girl 

    “Sometimes, a man’s gotta upgrade,” hissed Al. Edith broke their vows. Again. Sleeping pills in her brandy dociled her. He loaded her into the rusted wagon and let the exhaust fumes finish her off.

    “Al, I’m real sorry ‘bout Edith. Your wagon’s back from impound. We ain’t found no note, but most of the town knows ‘bout her mamma. Sometimes the apple don’t fall far from the tree. Shame. We’ll push this through so you can bury her by week’s-end. “ Sheriff Marsden headed towards the door, “I noticed your new ride. Sweet.”

    Al quipped, “Sometimes, a man’s gotta upgrade.”

    image cars

    PHOTO PROMPT – Copyright – Jean L. Hays

     
    • Nan Falkner 1:12 am on November 11, 2014 Permalink | Reply

      Dear Amanda, Good story and such a different turn – I love it. Well, Edith strayed one too many times, I guess. I think he will get away with it. Very well written! Nan 🙂

    • Yaral Code 5:27 pm on November 10, 2014 Permalink | Reply

      A serial killer in the making, well done.

      • ContactRida 2:50 pm on November 12, 2014 Permalink | Reply

        thank you very much:) well when you get away with it once, then the next time is easier…

    • Margaret 4:18 pm on November 10, 2014 Permalink | Reply

      He’s a nasty piece of work! I love the way the whole back story comes through Sheriff Marsden’s dialogue, and the repetition with loads of meaning from Al. Cleverly done. Very sinister.

      • ContactRida 2:48 pm on November 12, 2014 Permalink | Reply

        thank you Margaret:) it tells so much about ourselves what we each see in the same picture. and no, i am not a serial killer. that requires too much traveling;)

    • jenniesisler 6:00 am on November 10, 2014 Permalink | Reply

      Yikes! I hope Al gets caught, though I think the sheriff is a bit naive for that to happen any time soon.

      • ContactRida 2:44 pm on November 12, 2014 Permalink | Reply

        the consensus wants poor Al behind bars. i don’t know, i kinda like the bastard;)

    • Björn Rudberg (brudberg) 3:15 pm on November 8, 2014 Permalink | Reply

      Seems like things are going well for the the dark man,… But just maybe his new ride will take him to a traffic accident.

    • rochellewisoff 8:19 pm on November 7, 2014 Permalink | Reply

      Dear Amanda,

      I wonder if the police will get suspicious of the new ride. Somehow I don’t think so. He seems to have the perfect alibi. Well done.

      Shalom,

      Rochelle

    • jenniesisler 2:33 pm on November 7, 2014 Permalink | Reply

      Wow, that’s probably the darkest piece I’ve read for this prompt. Hopefully he gets what’s coming to him.

      • ContactRida 6:52 pm on November 7, 2014 Permalink | Reply

        thank you:) i do enjoy dark stories. perhaps his souped up monster car will look for an upgraded owner:)

    • patrickprinsloo 10:41 am on November 7, 2014 Permalink | Reply

      Oh, Edith. Not again. You know what will happen.
      Oh, Al, you won’t get away with it.
      Nice little tale.

      • ContactRida 6:53 pm on November 7, 2014 Permalink | Reply

        thank you. unfortunately he may never be caught. he’s a pillar of the community…

    • Caerlynn Nash 8:00 am on November 7, 2014 Permalink | Reply

      Well done! Great response to a tough prompt!

      • ContactRida 6:56 pm on November 7, 2014 Permalink | Reply

        thank you very much. i saw murder instantly when i looked at the rusted station wagon. can’t wait to read everyone else’s take…

    • draliman 7:52 am on November 7, 2014 Permalink | Reply

      Ooh, nasty man and he’s going to get away with it too! I like the implied “double upgrade”, now that he’s single again 🙂

      • ContactRida 6:59 pm on November 7, 2014 Permalink | Reply

        technically, he’s widowed:) but since the first murder was so easy, he may strike again…

    • Sandra 4:41 am on November 7, 2014 Permalink | Reply

      When a man’s had enough, he’s had enough. Could have waited a little while though for the up-grade.

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